This is the first kiss in MetalMark, Science Fiction Romance manuscript I'm revising.
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“Beautiful,” he whispered, an eternity later as his lips rested a heartbeat away from hers.
She rubbed her mouth back and forth across his, light as gossamer, the tickling sensation gripping his throat and sending small bumps over his skin.
God’s Stone!
He’d never known his first kiss would travel over his entire body, that the touch of one point could make him shudder all over.
Reluctant, he pulled back, not daring to take more from her so soon in their courtship.
Jazz caught at the back of his head and halted his retreat.
She rubbed her mouth back and forth across his, light as gossamer, the tickling sensation gripping his throat and sending small bumps over his skin.
God’s Stone!
He’d never known his first kiss would travel over his entire body, that the touch of one point could make him shudder all over.
Reluctant, he pulled back, not daring to take more from her so soon in their courtship.
Jazz caught at the back of his head and halted his retreat.
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25 comments:
His first kiss!?! I can't wait to read what else he learns!
Wow, nice kiss! "...heartbeat away from hers..." Awesome!
Sexy and sensual! Loved!
Sigh............ nice
Woot - not so fast! Love her assertiveness. Excellent descriptions.
Oh I love it when a woman takes charge. Love the kiss.
That is one powerful kiss! I love that she "halted his retreat". Great six!
Good girl, Jazz. Don't let him get away!
Tantalizing. Makes me wonder what else she's going to teach him.
Beautifully done, Ella. His sense of wonder is priceless.
Oh, that's sooo delicious. Perfect six!
Great sensuous scene--love his reaction and her determination not to let him go!
I don't think she's done with him yet. He's such an interesting character. Can't wait to read this.
Great kiss. And such an interesting choice of cuss words.
Love 'light as gossamer'. Great six.
Great six! Sweet and amazing. :)
Oh, nice. First kiss.
Also, nice to see a sci-fi romance. Always seems like there is a shortage of those. :(
Damn right...more kisses please!! Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"...halted his retreat." Love the visual image.
Sexy kiss. Sigh. I feel like I need a cigarette.
A beautiful first kiss.
Sweet and beautiful. First kisses should always be like this!
Lovely six - sigh.
What a great kiss!
Intense!
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