Sunday, March 20, 2011

MetalMark -- Six Sentences #4


This week, I thought I'd give a glimpse from the POV of the heroine's best friend, Shifty. She's been so much fun to write that I'm as concerned for her happy ending as I am for the heroine's.

She hurried away as fast as she could on her blasted legsshort and not shapely enough to make up for it. Not like Tami, whose body was damn perfect. She’d do her, and she wasn’t even a man.

She concentrated on keeping her face still, the tears at bay, until she got to her lab behind the closed door. She slid to the floor and covered her face, unable to keep the sobs from ripping from her chest.

This abstinence shit was hard.

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26 comments:

Ann Mayburn said...

Ok, now I want Shifty to have her own book so she can have a great HEA. Poor thing. :(

Gem Sivad said...

Lots of key information about character packed here. I know Shifty doesn't think she's attractive, she's in lust for someone, and she tries to suppress her emotions.

Great six!

gem

Sandra Sookoo said...

aww, how heart wrenching! Hope it gets better for her.

Sarah said...

Shifty definitely deserves her own happy ending.

Layna said...

Great six. Full of emotion. Hope she gets her own HEA.

Liz said...

Yep, she needs a HEA too!

Marsha A. Moore said...

She does deserve to find her own happiness...maybe become the main character in another book?

Pippa Jay said...

Wow, I'm intrigued!

Eleri Stone said...

Heart-breaking. You can't just leave Shifty like that, Ella!

Eve Cassidy said...

Fun six. Loving the name Shifty.

Lindsay said...

I agree, Shity needs her own happiness.

Hailey Edwards said...

Aww. Poor thing. She definitely needs her own book.
*waits for it*

Jessica Subject said...

Very intriguing with so much revealed in only six sentences.

It's always nice when you care for your secondary characters as much as your primary ones.

diannehartsock said...

Oh, too heartbreaking. You have to let her be happy soon!

Lynne Murray said...

Great character in six sentences! She does deserve a happy ending!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

"She’d do her, and she wasn’t even a man." ROFL! Oooh, poor thing, what abstinence, why is she crying? I want to know!

Susanna Fraser said...

Ooh, I like her, and I've only known her for six sentences! Good job.

Lauri J Owen said...

Poor Shifty. She needs to practice loving her body despite media ideals. Would love to hear more about her.

Kerrianne Coombes said...

What a fab six! Excellent!

Marie Dees said...

I feel for the girl!

Stacey Kennedy said...

Aw...poor Shifty!! But I know you'll give her a HEA!!

Dee Carney said...

Aww! I feel bad for her!

Laura Kaye said...

Oh, love this character! Made us feel so much empathy for her in such a short time. Great!

Christa Paige said...

You managed to pack a whole lot of detail in here that has kept my attention riveted!

Lisa Fox said...

Poor girl! Very vividly written.

Brenda ND said...

I like Shifty. I can't wait to read her story!