Last week, we left off with the heroine's first glimpse of the hero. Here's the hero's POV from MetalMark, my SF Romance, lust in space, work in progress:
The red witch with the tantalizing scent drew up straight, and Lye sensed her recognition of him at that precise moment. Like the fields of sage growing on the Mountain of Solace, the heady aroma of her arousal grew thick and his shaft tightened. Again.
He’d never experienced this heightened awareness for a mate. He nearly snorted in derision at himself. Of course he hadn’t experienced it, or even now he’d have a partner.
He’d never experienced this heightened awareness for a mate. He nearly snorted in derision at himself. Of course he hadn’t experienced it, or even now he’d have a partner.
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Love it! I must read more. :)
Great six this week, Ella. I'm really enjoying this story.
~Sarah
I'm in love with that first paragraph and I'm intrigued! Great little snippet.
Great sexy six!
ge,
I like this story, sexy!
Meow! I love the use of scent, so primal and yummy.
Great six! Love the story and need more!
Love the awareness between the 2 of them
A witch and a mate. Interesting bit, Ella. Definately a hook.
I love it!
Great six
I love your writing!! Can't wait to read this!! :)
Really like this whole setup. Can't wait to know what happens next!
A witch! I love the description!
Mmm... delicious!
Yum. Very sexy six, can't wait to see where this goes.
So good! More more!
Fabulous detail with the hero observing her body language and keying in to her reaction to him via sense of smell.
Oh yeah, want to now what happens next.
Love the fields of sage/Mountain of Solace/aroma of arousal sentence. LOVE. IT. I'm sensing he's about to have a partner, isn't he? LOL!
I LOVE this!
I'm so excited for MetalMark!
This is a great story. Thanks for sharing these six!
Very sensual!
Loved your six. Definitely would like to read more and you've got a terrific blog design.
wow. Sounds like there's going to be some really hot stuff coming soon!
Interesting, but I need a reason for the name Lye.
The first thing I think of is the caustic stuff used to make soap or burn hides. It's not a name I easily associate with a hero. If there's a good reason given for the name, I'm all for it, but the name grabbed my attention more than the scene.
Thanks everyone! Loved reading your comments and your #sixsunday posts.
It's also interesting to see the impressions people have over this tiny slice of the story. Very fun.
Patricia,
Thanks re: blog design. I do enjoy working on it! Usually.
Liana,
I do understand your reservations about his name & I did think long and hard before going with it. My reasons for using it are probably way too subtle for keeping it, but in writing him, I ended up having to use it--at least through first draft. It sorta stayed stuck to him, even though I thought of changing it. When I'm done, I might do a big search and replace.
On the other hand, I do enjoy using names that "don't fit" a character as a way of highlighting certain characteristics.
Thanks for bringing up that point & letting me know your reaction to it. It's very helpful.
ohhh, so good Ella!
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