Sunday, March 13, 2011

MetalMark -- Six Sentences #3


Last week, we left off with the heroine's first glimpse of the hero. Here's the hero's POV from MetalMark, my SF Romance, lust in space, work in progress:

The red witch with the tantalizing scent drew up straight, and Lye sensed her recognition of him at that precise moment. Like the fields of sage growing on the Mountain of Solace, the heady aroma of her arousal grew thick and his shaft tightened. Again.

He’d never experienced this heightened awareness for a mate. He nearly snorted in derision at himself. Of course he hadn’t experienced it, or even now he’d have a partner.
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27 comments:

Jessica Subject said...

Love it! I must read more. :)

Sarah Grimm said...

Great six this week, Ella. I'm really enjoying this story.

~Sarah

Fallon said...

I'm in love with that first paragraph and I'm intrigued! Great little snippet.

Gem Sivad said...

Great sexy six!

ge,

graylinfox said...

I like this story, sexy!

Ann Mayburn said...

Meow! I love the use of scent, so primal and yummy.

Sandra Sookoo said...

Great six! Love the story and need more!

Liz said...

Love the awareness between the 2 of them

D L Jackson said...

A witch and a mate. Interesting bit, Ella. Definately a hook.

Liia Ann White said...

I love it!
Great six

Stacey Kennedy said...

I love your writing!! Can't wait to read this!! :)

Eleri Stone said...

Really like this whole setup. Can't wait to know what happens next!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

A witch! I love the description!

Lucy Felthouse said...

Mmm... delicious!

Hailey Edwards said...

Yum. Very sexy six, can't wait to see where this goes.

Kerrianne Coombes said...

So good! More more!

Laurie A. Green said...

Fabulous detail with the hero observing her body language and keying in to her reaction to him via sense of smell.

Oh yeah, want to now what happens next.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Love the fields of sage/Mountain of Solace/aroma of arousal sentence. LOVE. IT. I'm sensing he's about to have a partner, isn't he? LOL!

Lisa Fox said...

I LOVE this!

Darcy Drake said...

I'm so excited for MetalMark!

Lauri J Owen said...

This is a great story. Thanks for sharing these six!

Susanna Fraser said...

Very sensual!

Patricia Preston said...

Loved your six. Definitely would like to read more and you've got a terrific blog design.

Jayel Kaye said...

wow. Sounds like there's going to be some really hot stuff coming soon!

Liana Brooks said...

Interesting, but I need a reason for the name Lye.

The first thing I think of is the caustic stuff used to make soap or burn hides. It's not a name I easily associate with a hero. If there's a good reason given for the name, I'm all for it, but the name grabbed my attention more than the scene.

Ella Drake said...

Thanks everyone! Loved reading your comments and your #sixsunday posts.
It's also interesting to see the impressions people have over this tiny slice of the story. Very fun.

Patricia,
Thanks re: blog design. I do enjoy working on it! Usually.

Liana,
I do understand your reservations about his name & I did think long and hard before going with it. My reasons for using it are probably way too subtle for keeping it, but in writing him, I ended up having to use it--at least through first draft. It sorta stayed stuck to him, even though I thought of changing it. When I'm done, I might do a big search and replace.

On the other hand, I do enjoy using names that "don't fit" a character as a way of highlighting certain characteristics.

Thanks for bringing up that point & letting me know your reaction to it. It's very helpful.

Keri Ford said...

ohhh, so good Ella!